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Is it supposed to have no lower jaw?

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>>708 If I was you i'd put the arrow vertically (like it was hit straight on), and spread the nearside wing a little more, for effect.

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>>706
This is damn good.

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>>710
Thanks, but that's not really a critique is it? :P

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First, the good: you did a nice job on the composition, setting the mood, and on the lighting. The light work on the bedsheets is particularly attractive. Composition is balanced, and the entire piece has a very "lazy Sunday morning" look to it, to me.

The problem, really, is the figure - not his anatomy, but his posing combined with how the light falls on him. Honestly, I wouldn't had been able to tell it was porn if you hadn't mentioned it! Because he's made out of black and gray brushstrokes with none of that nice lighting hitting him like the rest of the room, he ends up looking undefined. It really doesn't "read" as anything other than a dude leaning up against his bedframe on its own. You can get away with compact poses with lineart, but when you're working with what is essentially a silhouette, you need to pose things differently, possibly a bit more exaggerated, so it is immediately clear what is going on to the viewer.

I do, however, like the silhouette look, it makes the piece much more dramatic - the problem is making sure the silhouette is obvious without explanation. Your art should speak for itself, after all!

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>>712
Thank you!
You're actually not the first one to point out that I should work on my poses. I need to do more life drawing, too bad I can't get on any classes right now :/
Anyway, I took some notes based on your critique:

-think of the viewers, they won't see it like you do.
-The picture must speak for itself
-exaggerate the form when needed

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>>713

You're welcome! That's just about what I was rambling about, yeah.

Thing is, though, you really don't need classes to work on posing and anatomy. I personally like to people-watch and use posemaniacs (listed above) since I'm studying in a medical field and really don't have time for extra math classes. The issue isn't where you study, just that you do, in general. As long as you're constantly turning a critical eye towards your artwork, you will eventually learn and understand anatomy on its own. However, it does take more discipline to do this on your own.

For an example of good silhouetting, you may want to look at old Warner Brothers animation - just look up some old Bugs Bunny cartoons on Youtube or something, and pause through the more expressive actions. These old cartoons are really, really good at clear poses, albeit very, very exaggerated ones. Obviously you wouldn't make such exaggerated, cartoony poses with what looks to be your semi-realistic style, but I do find that drawing very loose, fast, silly sketches before hitting the "real" drawing helps keep my work from looking stiff.

Then again, in a masturbation pic, maybe that's the point. :V

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Oh wow, no comment.

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It's not bad, but mine are much better. I:<

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Just kidding, it's hot. xD

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>>694

From me, someone who can't draw. Awesome job dude. I'd watch you on FA.

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>>701 Work on your line weights, use thinner lines for more delicate features etc.

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>>695
also would like some redlining on this. Its just a really fast sketch I did tonight, thought I'd ask for some ways to make it better. I have no experience at drawing dicks jsyk.

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Oookaay, I'll work on the layout when I make more pages, because you're right, it is very crowded. Anything else? Preferably more constructive.

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>>579
It doesn't all have to be on one page.

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>>595

It's not all on one page, that isn't the end. Like I said, i'm going to fix the layout on the next pages

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>>580

There are 19 frames. That's AT LEAST 13 frames too many for a single page. The more frames on a page, the less valuable the information presented in each one becomes. Crowding is total wreckage in comics, it's not just a small issue.

Triangles, and other angular shapes, present feelings of tension and such.. I don't know if using triangles for frame shape can even work in the hands of pros, so you shouldn't even try them (or other weird angle shapes) until you're a pro at regular layout concepts first.

Research research research professional comics. How do they use their space, and what makes it work?

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>>579

One more thing, no fluid that comes out of anyone's body is blue. It's also the only color there, so it make it extra weird and noticeable.

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>>689 Just wondering what people have to say, it took me 2-3 hr's to make and it's the first thing I ever colored, in any media.

What can I do better?
what should change?
Any input will be nice,

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first of all avoid the dodge and burn tools like the plague, atleast until your skilled with the brush tool.
your lights look grey and your shadows look grey, they wont be, just use a darker or lighter colour. for example, the green skin, just use a lighter green for the lighter area.

oh and if you can, avoid any soft edged brush tools, some artists can get on well with it, buuut, if u have a tablet with opacity set to pen pressure and a hard edged brush it will give you more control, so try do that if u can.

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No one can give me any tips on how to improve? I'd really love at least one comment on it

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Patience, you'll get it eventually.

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>>463
You asked for it. Harsh critique incoming. Don't blame me if you jump from a bridge after reading this.

The good: I like the way you draw fur. It looks sufficiently fuzzy.

The bad:

The paw in the foreground looks terribly deformed. No matter whether it is supposed to be animalistic or humanoid, there is no way to hold it like that. It has no wrist. The forearm is too long. It'd take way too long for me to tell you all the things you'd need to fix about this, so I'll say this:

Get a full-length mirror and a chair. Lean yourself onto the back of the chair with your arm and take the position seen in the picture. Compare that with the picture. You'll see that it's essentially impossible for you to emulate the arm in that image. The ratio of forearm length to upper arm length is off on the smaller one too.

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