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The body is quite ok for a comic character.
But the head don't work. Try to understand how other succeful comic artist draw their head. Draw bigger eyes, give more expression and expressivity to your character, turn the direction were she is pointing the nose.

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>>598 Here's what I have after a bit of tweak. I just sketched in the tail at the last second. I'm still working on it. I'm going to try and balance out the shades a bit since it seems a bit two-tone to me right now.

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Lighting is confusing, is the point.

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Work on value.
Seriously, work on value.

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>>603 Thank you. This is very very helpful of you and I'll get to work on fixing her up a bit. I appreciate you taking time off to show me what I'm lacking.

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>>603
fukkin saved :D

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>>596 thanks ^^

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Another one

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>>607
Same points as abov with the tail and nails, and also ͟s͟h͟o͟r͟t͟er forehead like the way canines have. Also, canines' eyes don't face straight forward like humans, they face more to the sides, and since furry is a mix between the two, the eyes could face too to the side a bit more.
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>>608
No one believes that you're me, dumbfuck.

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Except maybe OP.

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>>581
An update

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>>581 I think its looking pretty good ^v^, she's very cute.

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Why does it look like her left arm is about one hand's length shorter than her right? Speaking of hands, where are they?

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>>589

Those are pretty easy questions to answer.

1.) Because the left arm is shorter than the right arm
2.) I haven't added any details to the hands and feet yet, but both are hidden. her right hand will be half visible though. It's going to be resting on her hip bone facing away from the viewer. I imagine that her left hand will be behind her left leg maybe to be holding it up.
Working on the limbs now.

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here we go. Update-o-rama

Fixed the leg and the arm. Still working on the main things like defining the legs, arms, etc.

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Omit your line layer or paint over the lines. Leaving a hint of them there might work, if they look like they were traditionally painted on (usually much easier to do if they're thick and globby).

Try thinking of your tool as a paintbrush. Have you ever painted traditionally? What with?
My experimentation is limited, so I haven't much messed with custom made brushes that attempt to emulate traditional ones. For technique itself, using a higher opacity and a hard brush tends to lead an image to look like it's been done with acrylic... it kind of feels more like using acrylic too, ultimately thicker and not as smooth as oil...

In this picture, the chain in the midground looks very digital, due to the completely solid completely opaque round brush used. The edges are just too crisp. The one in the background has a couple areas like that too.
The one in the front is pretty good but I don't have much of an eye for having blurry acrylic... hyper-tom's really good at it though, but he uses an airbrush. http://hyper-tom.deviantart.com/art/Deja-Vu-89307604

For the character, maybe work on blocking in the area instead of relying on lines to convey the edges. Paint the form from the silhouette.
Always use the biggest possible brush for rendering, and add the sweet details in last, including any useage of black or white.

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>>562

Hello there Deatzh, thank you very much for the input, it's pretty spot on I think.

To answer your question, I have painted traditionally, with just about everything you could think of (watercolor, oil, acrylic, gouache, and some temper paints.) For my character here I didn't really use a round brush, I used a chalk brush set to become more opaque with higher pen pressure. One of the things I have been trying to get a grasp on in my recent work is having that subtle layer of texture there to help it not look digital, at the same time I am not really looking to emulate real world painting...for that I would use painter XI or something.

Your deer painting does look very much like acrylic paint thanks to all the hard edges,

Also, one of my weaknesses in illustration for a long time has been relying on line a little too much :3 So, you are right... I did paint over them to try and make them blend a bit better though, none of the line work is black.

Well, thanks again, I hope some of what I said makes sense :S. If you thin of anything else let me know!

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>>536

forgot one thing... here is the same piece without any linework.

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>>536 Wow. Lookin nice sir. I agree with Deatzh about the middle chain looking digital, but as for the the looseness of the piece I enjoy it. It's nice to see those thin, graceful contours holding together the larger blocks of color.

The overall layout of the piece is nice as well- nothing is centered and it seems to be following the rule of thirds. Apart from tightening up that middle chain, my only other suggestion would be to alter the color of the most distant chain. As objects recede from the viewer, they become more similar (in both value and color) to the background. The value seems on, but I think the chain should be more greenish. The chain in the bottom right becomes an eye sore because it's so gray.

Overall though, I think it's a very nice piece. Keep it up.

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>>575

wow GREAT observation on the atmospheric perspective there, I had never noticed that! Thank you for your words! :3

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And this guy, of course.

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And to finish, something creepy and anorexic. Huzzah.

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By crit section you mean "Everyone that's not Deatzh" because you still totally came to me for general help with half of these, Lol.

AND I HAVE ALREADY TOLD YOU THINGS SO MY POSTING IN YOUR THREAD IS KIND OF POINTLESS.
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>>563
Actually, yeah, that's pretty accurate. xD
And I am most definitely grateful for it. c:

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>>542
Your shading is much better than your grasp of anatomy and foreshortening.
Also, different materials reflect light in diferent ways, and the lightness of their colour is another factor. The unshaded outline of the thin light wifebeater would be almost radiant, so try replacing the colour of the contour with a white from the palette of the photograph.

Also, there is no white object behind the camera, therefore you have a phantom lamp.

>>544
The strong outline dominates. Making it a lighter shade would bring forth the details.

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Who are you? You seem familiar.

You really need to get some basics of anatomy down. Search for and study reference material, some of which is provided above. Skeletal structure, muscular structure, fat deposits and then flesh. It sounds more difficult than it is, although it is horribly tedious. It is also horribly enjoyable, and I can't see why one would forego anatomical studies.

Stay away from color, you need to get the basics of value down as well. Plus the white highlighting on the character makes her look like rubber, and in this case it's really not all that appealing.

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>>565
Thanks for the advices deatzh.

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>>547
In addition to what Mr. Deathz, spend time visualizing in your minds eye what you want the piece to look like. Frame each detail for itself and then compose the frames into a whole one by one.

If the line you draw doesn't look like what you expected, take a step back and remember clearly what it looked like in your mind. Erase the mistake and try again with much concentration.

Getting a picture drawn might take longer this way, but you will find the result much more satisfying and you'll be motivated to continue.

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And inevitably:

Eh, turns out i couldn't leave it alone after all...

Did a lot of skuff on the skin, a bit on the feathers and nothing so far on the horns.

With the skin i'm relatively happy so far, except for one patch on the neck.
The feathers definitely need more work but i'm a bit unsure how to continue.

Request for comments still stands of course (or i wouldn't be posting it here)

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Ummm, I'm not Deatz, but can you make just a character sheet (also in b/w only) and post it here?

It's hard to say something on a race design, with only a 3/4 head view.

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>>569
Sorry for taking so long to reply, i had a few busy days.

To be honest, i was mostly looking for comments on what's there so far and some advice on the feathers but i'll try to whip up a proper character sheet after i finish this (or before, if my attention span is too short)
The rest of the design isn't going to be very exciting, they're anthropomorphic, digitigrade with a relatively short, thick tail. Though i guess figuring out posture and perhaps hip structure is going to be a bit of a challenge

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I'd rather have you take a look at this picture, since In my opinion it's better in terms of art. Thanks.

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You still looking for help on this?

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>>240

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>>244 Her breasts are very flat, they should be a bit more round, May I redline?

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>>558 newer

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>>558 newest

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What are you going for, exactly?