Art critique and advice; beginner artists are welcome to post here; includes an oekaki. (NO FLAMES)
Artists, read before posting!
Before you post your art to ask for critique, please read these tutorials. They explain the basic principles of drawing and figure drawing. Most posts where these basics are missing will never get a response, as people are quite frankly sick and bored of explaining over and over that you would have to pretty much learn how to draw first, before you could improve.
A tiny bit of shading is all you really honestly need, like with this first one. I'll put up a bit of a modified picture to give you an idea.
Besides that, it looks good.
If you don't exactly know the whole shading thing, there's some pretty cool tutorials floating around in the internet. There's also the way you can teach yourself, set something near a light source and just practice the shading. There's a bunch of different types of shading, but I prefer the one that I used in this picture.