Art critique and advice; beginner artists are welcome to post here; includes an oekaki. (NO FLAMES)
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I always have the same problem. The pose does need work; adding colors won't fix it... unfortunately, as I have the same problem, I'm not sure what to fix. I tend to get stuck with straight lines and harsh angles... so perhaps aim for more curves? It produces a "whooshing" effect in the composition.
Maybe angle his head down dramatically, so he's not just looking straight ahead, and bend his right arm tightly, like a "YESSS" fist (lol)!
BTW, I really like it. Props for not posting the usual fchan fap fodder.
I've found that choosing a pose is more about how you feel the the character is feeling.
Have you ever been involved in a stage play or dance? How did you feel about the character? Was your portrayal sharp tongued, sneaky, majestic/proud, or solemn?
Martial arts also use this a lot, especially in Taijhi Quan. I've used how I felt about the character to convey poses. Grab a mirror. Don't watch yourself while you get into a pose if you're your own worst critic or you'll feel uncomfortable, lose the feeling, and lose your result. When you find the 'feel' of the pose you want, observe the angles of your arms and body like the angle degrees and what not....or if you can just imagine yourself and the pose, don't bother with the mirror, just do some Qi exercises. Draw it.