>>1591
Pretty much covered what needed to be changed up. But what I would suggest is grab s'more reference shots and just try to draw the form of the human body. Break everything down into basic shapes and work off your rough. There's a reason why in art 24/101 you draw a LOT of primitive shapes ;)
Another tip I'd have for you is to observe other peoples works. Find some art streams to get an idea for process, or even just take a look at some regular pics/tutorials. Heck, hit up the tutorials up top, they'll help believe me!
I'd also suggest the following websites to further aid yourself in learning how to draw.
http://www.ctrlpaint.com/
A website which its primary focus is digital painting. If you hit up the CtrlPaint - Unplugged section, you'll learn the goodies that most Art 24/101 student will learn in college. I HIGHLY recommend this if you want to get your basics down, it contains the fundamentals you'll need.
http://www.artsyposes.com/index
A website filled with not only reference shots for poses, but also a slew of other goodies. You can learn new techniques and check out other peoples works.
http://www.lovecastle.org/draw/
A powerful reference generator to help aid you in drawing lively figures. What's great about this website is that you can learn how to efficiently draw faster if you utilize the timer. Whether it's roughs or a speed drawing, this website is for you.
Good luck to you friend, keep on drawing!