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Art critique and advice; beginner artists are welcome to post here; includes an oekaki. (NO FLAMES)

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critique

File: lioness3.jpg -(86469 B, 1200x1800)

09/11/08(Sun)15:38 No.215 215

its been a while since i posted here...anyway, i want critique on this piece
and i need some help with inking i cant seem to get the lines right.

09/11/08(Sun)21:05 No.216 -

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>>215
Can you post an example of inking you consider correct?

09/11/09(Mon)11:40 No.217 -

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>>215 I think the eyes are a bit too small and the breasts have too much space between them. The arms also are too thin (aren't proportional to the thickness of the legs). The left ear is also rather wonky.

09/11/12(Thu)15:05 No.219 -

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>>216 something like this http://www.furaffinity.net/view/3020357/ no broken looking lines. dark and light in certain places

09/11/12(Thu)15:07 No.220 -

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>>217 thanks

09/12/07(Mon)22:14 No.255 -

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>>215
try to make it look more curvy and fluid, those lines are a bit jagged.

Deatzh#Artist 09/12/13(Sun)02:01 No.294 -

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Take some time and brush through some anatomy again. I don't particularly feel like putting my eight paragraphs of what you need to do with the anatomy here, so... internal structure, skeleton, muscle, proportion. The fun stuff.
I would suggest drawing out actual human faces too. Study from real ones, really look at the planes and structure of the face. Right now you've an anime-inspired head going on this character, which can have a tendency to flatten out any form that a person places otherwise onto a character's body.
As for the inking...
Well, the picture you linked, which you consider good inking, is interesting. I am trying to figure out the artist's intentions with how thick the lines are in certain areas. It leads the eye to believe that the hips and thighs are either THE focus of the piece or that they're closer to us than everything else, but then when it tapers down after the knee it's rather confusing.
Actually, a lot of the work is like that. While the lines are wonderfully smooth and connected, the dissolving feature seems largely misplaced.
So for basic inking, you could do a couple things.
In Photoshop: learn how to use the pen tool. Look up tutorials on dA for it, I could probably help given some other time of the day.
In Photoshop: Draw each line individually. Long strokes, applies pressure as well. If it's not good, undo and redo.
Easy PaintTool Sai: I prefer this for weighted lining. You can actually set it so that there's an intentional, smooth lag between where your mouse was and is, so making the perfect line is actually so much easier in the case of having only a mouse or a small-ass tablet.
Will go into further detail if requested.
I am quite ignorant on vectors, as is, so cannot tell you how your linked artist can do what he/she does.
Bah, I apologize, this particular post is a bit under par.

File: crit_1260733798253.zelu_zelu4.jpg -(42326 B, 616x847)

09/12/13(Sun)13:49 No.300 -

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>>215 not a new picture but i still would like critique on it

09/12/13(Sun)13:51 No.301 -

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>>294 thanks, what you said was helpful. in sai were you talking about the smoothing tool?

File: demon.png -(86803 B, 616x616)

Zelu 09/12/24(Thu)15:16 No.348 -

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>>215 new picture, my first time really painting in Ps.
critique appreciated.

09/12/25(Fri)12:22 No.349 -

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>>348
What the poots is that supposed to be? Don't tell me you've lost your way and ventured into cubism?

File: Demon_Girl_by_jpg.jpg -(30929 B, 616x616)

Zelu 09/12/25(Fri)14:51 No.350 -

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>>349 haha is that your way of telling me it looks like crap?
yeah i guess it does... here the sketch its a demon girl thingy..
anyway i need help painting, i don't know where to start.

09/12/30(Wed)17:42 No.375 -

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>>350 painting is different than drawing. if you are doing this digitally you will be painting over your sketch lines.

Zelu 10/01/01(Fri)23:28 No.429 -

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i understand that i just don't know how i should start learning how to paint.
should i start with shapes?grayscale? learn color?....
this is fustrating..

Deatzh#Artist 10/01/02(Sat)09:26 No.438 -

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I may be able to help you. A lot of posts I've not got to yet are on my list of things I need to get to... uh...
Probably not today, have family things going on allllll day long, BUT I SEE YOU AND WILL GET TO YOU.

Zelu 10/01/03(Sun)17:59 No.458 -

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>>438 okay thanks again

File: thinlines.png -(132038 B, 616x616)

Zelu 10/01/03(Sun)18:14 No.459 -

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>>215 alright more sketch-crap! something seems off on the pose but i cant tell what it is, maybe its the lower leg/feet?
>>300
also i noticed no one said anything about this, is there nothing wrong with it?

10/01/12(Tue)13:06 No.502 -

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>>215
>>459
Question: Are the necks on these supposed to be elongated? Because if not it's seriously throwing them off.

Zelu 10/01/13(Wed)17:17 No.504 -

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>>502 nah, i need to make the necks smaller.

AaarbydeeTul108 10/03/14(Sun)23:47 No.648 -

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>>215 >>504
Making the necks smaller? no. please keep as is. Reason being that both of your posted drawings have an elegance to them and one way to retain that feel is in the basic anatomy. Take, for instance, the Kiminoans of Star Wars in George Lucas' "Clone Wars": Their makeup requires a bit of elegance and care of movement. Instead of everyone downing an elongated neck, why not try to match the rest of the body to the neck?
http://www.furaffinity.net/user/blueblur8lover/
http://www.furaffinity.net/user/peritian/
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ This artist draws and excellent example of what I'm getting at!
In any case, keep going! You're doing good!

Zelu 10/03/26(Fri)21:39 No.666 -

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>>648 thankya

File: Armber.jpg -(212863 B, 806x1011)

Zelu 10/03/26(Fri)21:48 No.667 -

667

Well now since I have been once again inspired to post here,
i might as well show some of my shit,
This isn't really furry but the character isn't human so that's my excuse

File: mindna.jpg -(73565 B, 596x1038)

Zelu 10/03/26(Fri)21:53 No.668 -

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>>215
Bang

File: 3.jpg -(46874 B, 616x616)

Zelu 10/04/05(Mon)17:04 No.677 -

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>>215
Hey you with the D name, you
still come here? if you do I need halp!!!
anyway this is unfinished because i don't know what the fuck i'm doing .

File: 3.jpg -(48833 B, 616x616)

Zelu 10/04/05(Mon)17:59 No.678 -

678

nvm i finished it. i still dont know what the fuck im doing..

File: ocean.jpg -(34343 B, 700x700)

Zelu 10/05/26(Wed)12:17 No.752 -

752

Where my crit be cuz?

10/05/26(Wed)14:01 No.753 -

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>>752
http://fchan.us/crit/res/541.html

10/05/28(Fri)02:20 No.758 -

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>>215
WORK ON ANATOMY BEFORE YOU ASK FOR A CRITIQUE! SERIOUSLY.
before anyone asks, go pick up a fucking anatomy book and study it, or you're just wasting everyones time with your horribly disfigured lumps of living tissue you call drawings.

10/05/28(Fri)13:02 No.761 -

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>>752
While I have to agree with >>758 , the face is looking pretty good, at least, better than your older ones.